I think you have a good story here but the ending standup needs to change. You want to avoid statements like, "he will continue his passion for many years to come." You can't see into the future, you don't know how long he can continue to do this. You can say that we hope to see him on the sidelines reporting for many years to come, but you can't say that he will be doing it for sure. Things happen and he may decide to retire in a few years. That's certainly not "many years to come." Let's be more creative with your wording. Just think about what you want to say to wrap up this story about him. This is your conclusion to your paper. I know you can come up with something better. Keep at it!